Thursday, September 3, 2015

Haikus



Purple in the light
Royalty in the morning
Lavender at night 




Blue as the ocean
And dark as the moon tonight 
Unforgotten now

1 comment:

  1. Hi Taylor. I like your haikus. I like the contrasts of purple in three different instances within the first haiku, and I wonder who or what is the subject of the second haiku? A lost soul who wants to be remembered perhaps? Both haikus leave openness to interpretation and use the colors in an interesting way. I like how the first haiku rhymes in its first and third lines. The second haiku doesn't require any rhymes and I like that it's sort of ambiguous. It does cause one to wonder.

    As usual, your work is very good, the haikus have good form, and I appreciate your efforts. Unlike so many people who attempt writing haikus you keep with the syllable requirements and I very much appreciate that. Nothing drives me crazier than when someone writes "haikus" and ignores the syllable requirments. Looking forward to more great writing!

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